tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post3840133638671948153..comments2024-01-21T16:13:37.507-06:00Comments on Churlish Figure: He frowns, "Gee, My Life's a Funny Thing, Am I Still Too Young?"Churlshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00735862031383588332noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-29675993572020597612010-01-05T23:25:44.755-06:002010-01-05T23:25:44.755-06:00REl,
Thanks. That's good feedback coming from...REl,<br /><br />Thanks. That's good feedback coming from a guy.<br /><br />Tara,<br /><br />The character is loosely based on my dad. I don't remember him well. Which is why this is mostly fiction.<br /><br />Johnny Yen,<br /><br />I wonder if that guy and I had the same dad. ha ha.<br /><br />LauraB.,<br /><br />yeah. It wasn't too hard to put myself in his shoes to write this. Although, I would never in a million years, ever be able to leave my girls.<br /><br />Pamela,<br /><br />Thanks. I hope your migraine meds are working for you now.<br /><br />Booda Baby,<br /><br />Thanks. That is so helpful. Mostly I'm just trying to write things down to sort through later. So, your feedback will help me rework it better.<br /><br />Ananda,<br /><br />Thank you. I love your writing too.<br /><br />Mr MAnuel,<br /><br />Don't give up. Finish your story, so we can all read it.Churlitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05018288474865559384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-48425251262107764532010-01-05T22:36:20.295-06:002010-01-05T22:36:20.295-06:00Good job! I too like to to write and have even wr...Good job! I too like to to write and have even written the first chapter of a story I have outlined. I am sure that is as far as it will get though.MrManuelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003292550689890179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-8345376298279288372010-01-05T20:39:12.510-06:002010-01-05T20:39:12.510-06:00Very well done! Short, sweet and wrapped up nicel...Very well done! Short, sweet and wrapped up nicely. I agree... we all feel these things. But there is also a masculine tone here. Keep writing Churlita!Ananda girlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09578471199205376974noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-61034684168559114922010-01-05T20:23:36.382-06:002010-01-05T20:23:36.382-06:00Wheee! I'm really happy to read you writing!!...Wheee! I'm really happy to read you writing!! I'd like to go away and think, but I bet when I returned, I'd say the same thing. Nice voice. I think if you edited out a few of the 'almost exposition' lines, you'd get closer to his ... pulse. <br /><br />BTW, these are a great couple of lines: <br /> <br />All the people, all the kids, all of them needing. Every year he acquired more people, and they all wanted something from him -booda babyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09424036488795599663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-89252082710899948442010-01-05T15:10:44.141-06:002010-01-05T15:10:44.141-06:00I'm sorry, brain can't think. I'm sure...I'm sorry, brain can't think. I'm sure it's great.Pamelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15657357424543075040noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-22966123373009645972010-01-05T12:55:04.527-06:002010-01-05T12:55:04.527-06:00I love the universal feeling of this. Yes, it is ...I love the universal feeling of this. Yes, it is a man's voice, but it could be anyone really, who has ever felt overwhelmed or trapped.laura b.https://www.blogger.com/profile/15086009761943858915noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-74137082050156851762010-01-05T10:32:01.321-06:002010-01-05T10:32:01.321-06:00As I've said before, I have no idea what goes ...<i>As I've said before, I have no idea what goes on in guys heads</i><br /><br />Ha-- truth be told, we don't know what's going on inside our heads!<br /><br />I like the writing-- clean and you stay in a consistent voice. <br /><br />It reminded me of a non-fiction piece that I read in the Chicago Reader years ago, about a guy cleaning out the home of his deceased father, who'd left the family years before. His father had made and lost fortunes building suburbs and subdivisions. What he left behind was thousands and thousands of the pulp fiction books he'd been addicted to reading.Johnny Yenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06561248220244037567noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-56865570628838126942010-01-05T07:14:24.753-06:002010-01-05T07:14:24.753-06:00I'm intrigued, write some more please! I can d...I'm intrigued, write some more please! I can definitely relate to that character. I've had my moments. In the middle of the department meetings we used to have each day, I'd imagine getting up and jumping out the window that led to the woods, and just walking home. Ground story window.Tarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16103812856035857566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-14745444331297409832010-01-05T03:04:51.138-06:002010-01-05T03:04:51.138-06:00Churlita,
Nicely done. But it scares me when you ...Churlita,<br />Nicely done. But it scares me when you climb inside my head and read my thoughts. And hey, I thought this was a fiction piece? ;)<br />relrelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09030572981830789370noreply@blogger.com