tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post1625711741011063815..comments2024-01-21T16:13:37.507-06:00Comments on Churlish Figure: It's Just the Fear of Losing YouChurlshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00735862031383588332noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-62478140428499126552009-09-11T05:31:30.308-05:002009-09-11T05:31:30.308-05:00Holy shit.
you have to write this.
I'd like it...Holy shit.<br />you have to write this.<br />I'd like it from Marla's POV- but change a bit, where she sees all what happened to you... <br /> then post- or better yet, send it to my writing contest<br /> scratchcontest.net<br /> you've got until 9-23<br />LindaAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11376100534890229940noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-429698850679793912009-09-10T23:31:54.307-05:002009-09-10T23:31:54.307-05:00Rel,
Thanks for suggestion. It does limit me a lo...Rel,<br /><br />Thanks for suggestion. It does limit me a lot too.I might try writing it in the 3rd person and see which seems to work better. And have fun canoeing. It sounds like a blast.<br /><br />Pamela,<br /><br />She had two broken legs. Right above the knees. It could have been so tragic. I instinctively held her in such a way that she didn't hit her head. At 20 weeks, he plates weren't closed and she wouldn't have survived.<br /><br />Susan,<br /><br />Thanks. We'll see how it goes...<br /><br />Tara,<br /><br />Luckily, she doesn't remember it. It freaked me out for years and years.<br /><br />lauraB.,<br /><br />I did. My friends used to call her the Y baby, because she looked like an upside down Y in it.<br /><br />AlienCG,<br /><br />Thank you. Yeah. I guess we've all been through the shit at some point.<br /><br />Ananda,<br /><br />I'll definitely post it in 3rd person, if I go with that. That's the nice thing about writing, you can just keep rewriting and rewriting until you get it right.<br /><br />Booda Baby,<br /><br />For sure. Even without being in a workshop in years, I'm sure I'm a much better writer now. I think part of it, is that I know myself better and don't take myself so seriously.<br /><br />Johny Yen,<br /><br />I was definitely going for immediacy when I first wrote this, so I'm glad to hear that.<br /><br />I'm glad everything turned out alright too. I still have a little memory loss, but Coadster is doing great.Churlitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05018288474865559384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-85434617221240443702009-09-10T21:51:58.382-05:002009-09-10T21:51:58.382-05:00Oh my-- your description makes me feel like I'...Oh my-- your description makes me feel like I'm in that spot. Glad everything turned out all right.Johnny Yenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06561248220244037567noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-63350771251888725082009-09-10T21:19:09.193-05:002009-09-10T21:19:09.193-05:00I remember this! I agree with Anonymous, that firs...I remember this! I agree with Anonymous, that first person works beautifully IF the point is for the reader to be there. <br /><br />If it's part of a longer story, though, ... well ...<br /><br />I'm thrilled - THRILLED! - you're going to start writing writing. I've come to believe (and I definitely didn't) that Virginia Woolf was right. We can write and we can tell stories when we're younger, but since most of us (if not all) are still finding our true balance, it all tends to be slightly ... not good. And then the time comes when both your voice and your gift of editing are rich enough to unleash something else. This is IT!! Yay for YOU!!!booda babyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09424036488795599663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-75998604367889418592009-09-10T20:46:57.279-05:002009-09-10T20:46:57.279-05:00How terrifying during and after! My mom senses ar...How terrifying during and after! My mom senses are frying!<br /><br />You tell it very well, in fact as I was reading I thought I hear Churlita's voice in this. That is if I had to choose which of the bloggers I read wrote this... I'd have known it was you if the names were changed.<br /><br />You should write! I'd like to see it in third person too.Ananda girlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09578471199205376974noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-39885948029284208642009-09-10T17:57:27.871-05:002009-09-10T17:57:27.871-05:00Quite the ordeal, Churlita. I'm glad you both...Quite the ordeal, Churlita. I'm glad you both made it through okay. Thanks for sharing and I like your writing.AlienCGhttp://www.aliencg.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-19771104461264755352009-09-10T16:31:49.347-05:002009-09-10T16:31:49.347-05:00Everything about that makes me shudder. I bet you...Everything about that makes me shudder. I bet you got tons of questions when Coadster was in her little cast.laura b.https://www.blogger.com/profile/15086009761943858915noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-54171112737482170382009-09-10T12:47:50.884-05:002009-09-10T12:47:50.884-05:00You describe it very well. I'm so sorry that y...You describe it very well. I'm so sorry that you and Coadster had to experience that accident, though!Tarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16103812856035857566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-59955974020831157032009-09-10T09:43:16.972-05:002009-09-10T09:43:16.972-05:00That's great you're going to write again!!...That's great you're going to write again!!Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00421276422785703472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-63388935640895475032009-09-10T06:36:32.499-05:002009-09-10T06:36:32.499-05:00All she had was a broken hip? That's lucky.All she had was a broken hip? That's lucky.Pamelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15657357424543075040noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-50524398512988862302009-09-10T05:50:25.510-05:002009-09-10T05:50:25.510-05:00Google/Blogger is being a real pistol this morning...Google/Blogger is being a real pistol this morning; they insist I change my password and won't tlet me log in until I do. I probably will after I cool down. :)<br />rel<br /><br />p.s. I'll be off line for 3 days while doing the canoe race in the Adirondak'sAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35934196.post-47022574876048271162009-09-10T05:47:45.991-05:002009-09-10T05:47:45.991-05:00Churlita,
I think first person works very well in ...Churlita,<br />I think first person works very well in this case. It allows the reade to feel the emotion as though they were in the buggy too.<br />relAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com